Writer's Toolbox: Short Story (Egg Stage to Butterfly Stage)

Egg Stage


I wrote this piece in my house on a Sunday. It was calm and peaceful, just like all the other times I wrote a journal prompt. Then, I thought of how calm and peaceful my whole neighborhood was. It was around the time when the temperature started to drop this year, which gave me the realization of what my neighborhood had in common with itself throughout all seasons. I have always found my neighborhood to be calm and peaceful, so this is what I chose to write about. I used some descriptive language to help the reader capture the setting and what the surrounding scenery was like. Such as, "Fog is like a sheet that gets cast across all of Wilmette, covering up all sound." What you get from that sentence is that the fog is bigger than my neighborhood, and things are much quieter whenever it arrives. That is the power of descriptive language, you can tell what things are like without it being boring. The main theme of this piece is the fog. It is one thing that changes my neighborhood a lot during warmer seasons but, again, Wilmette still remains calm and peaceful. I thought of weather conditions I found most calming, and then I thought about fog. That is a quick little origin story about why I chose to write about fog. I intended to have fun making this piece and find out more about my neighborhood, visually. I think it stands as a fine piece of descriptive language and setting. I hope it paints an accurate picture of where I live.

Caterpillar Stage

In this stage, I will change the whole mood of the story into psychological horror. This will allow me to show you what this story is like in a whole new perspective.

Why is this neighborhood always so calm and peaceful? Does that ever change? Please let there be one season that can bring this place up a notch. I have lived here forever, and weather is the only thing that seems to change this place. Fog is calm and peaceful, but does something lurk inside the fog? It feels like a room that I can't be left alone in. It is dark and scary. I like dark and scary. Dark and scary gives me more of a thrill than anything else. I see things that no one else can when it is dark. I find dark and scary to be calm and peaceful. Why can't every day be like a foggy day? There is nothing to fear on a foggy day...is there?

Chrysalis Stage

The Chrysalis Stage is when we trade work with someone else during this project and we give each other feedback. The person who reviewed my work knew the theme of my story after reading the sentence, "Fog is like a sheet that gets cast across all of Wilmette." He seemed to appreciate the descriptive language I used in this story - it conjured an image of my neighborhood for him. The two suggestions that were given to me were to either type the story, or scan it in. I don't like to scan stuff that much because scanning makes everything look like it was smeared with an eraser. So, I think I will type it. I appreciate all of the information he gave me about my story, and I enjoyed giving him some feedback, as well.

Butterfly Stage

Basically, the butterfly stage is when I include one of the two suggestions given to me by my partner and put it on this blog post. I didn't want to scan the story, so I did the other suggestion and typed it down. Enjoy!

My neighborhood is always so calm and peaceful. That is the one thing it has in common with itself throughout all seasons. Temperature sure does take affect around here. Something we often get during the warmer seasons is fog. Fog is like a sheet that gets cast across all of Wilmette, covering up all sound. The fog is spooky, silent, atmospheric, and I like it. It calms me sometimes. Having a shorter range of sight can help you see more of something else. You might find spooky, cool. On a bright sunny day, you might treat it like a normal day. But on a foggy day, you might treat it like an adventure.

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